Publication 1107
By George Trialonis on
Saturday, May 17, 2008
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My aching blue buds my sinews empower �
when you are not looking,
when you are naked sleeping
up there � to launch me into your misty bower.
Think not that I must climb the turret tower,
or fret at openings barred with wrought iron grille,
for I can blink to naught all hindrance at will
and nest upon your balcony sill �
a groin-glowing eager bower.
Blast my desire for you, little flower!
as you innocently roll from side to side,
for ever in my dreams a maiden bride
and to mischief at dawn always a bower
Publication 1108
By Arcadian on
Saturday, May 17, 2008
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I like the music in this George: the consonance, alliteration, the varied meter etc and the unusual rhyme scheme:
it starts with ABBA in first stanza, then for the second
ACCCA, and finally with ADDA
did you intentionally break this pattern for effect ?
na isse kala
nicos
Publication 1110
By George Trialonis on
Sunday, May 18, 2008
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I'm glad you like it Nicos.
As for the pattern ... it's half (!) intentional. Perhaps you have noticed that poems lead you to where they want to go, particularly where the unconscious is involved. This poem is related to a (lucid) dream experience.
Kalimera.
George
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