Publication 1105
By Arcadian on
Saturday, May 17, 2008
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10:40
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Australia
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Friday, July 30, 2004
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Autumn At Dog Rocks
Autumn has seeded
rusted skies
and shadows
creep on fallen leaves.
Moss and lichen lie
on granite bedrock
to age no more
in winter's sleep.
It's turning cold
and the river gorge
moves silent
to some warm horizon.
Good to see you
arc you rays
this way again.
I love this rural
idyllic interlude.
The glass-eye is wide open
and blinks fast
to catch your
lithesome lust of light
in memory,
as you caress
with warm rays --
in that decisive moment,
the emerald fir
and burnt-orange bristles
that radiate in unison
under your solar smile.
Notes
I was there recently at Dog Rocks Chewton in Central Victoria;
a small rural gold mining town at the turn of the century
( population of about 600 and is 130 Kilometers away from Melbourne )
Doing a landscape photography shoot : "writing with light",
when Kalliope, as usual, nudged me in the back ...
Also note we have autumn down under (southern hemisphere), a breath away from winter.
Publication 1106
By George Trialonis on
Saturday, May 17, 2008
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11:37
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Greece
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Nicos
This is an excellent poem. It seems to me that poems come easy to you. You are very talented.
You use alliteration in effective ways, I have noticed elsewhere too. For example, in this poem you write "lithesome lust of light". I like it; it's just that I cannot understand why "lithesome". I'm sure you are talking about the sunlight, right?
Best: George
Publication 1109
By Arcadian on
Saturday, May 17, 2008
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20:15
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Australia
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George,
thanks for your kind words and feedback.
You are right, of course, it is light -- I have however used the allusion of a human body ; anthropomorphisis, to add a little tonal weight -- to make it interesting and draw the reader in different direction.
Nicos
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